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YOU WERE THERE

You were there in the wind, I heard it whisper your name,
you were there in the rain, I felt your tears drop down on my face,
you were there in the snow, the flakes falling from your soul into mine,
you were there, on sunny days I saw your eyes in the bright rays
you were there, espying me from behind our sister moon

I looked for you in the wind, I heard it whisper your name,
I looked for you in the rain, I felt you cry upon my face,
I counted the flakes of snow and knew that somewhere out there you were counting too

I looked into my ice-cream on sunny days and saw you melt into my heart
and in the full light of the moon,your reflection could be clearly seen
my darling lost son I looked for you everywhere and now I have found you
I can rest again and love you the way that I should have been allowed to

ŠAnna Brown march 20002

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